Thread: Graveyards.
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Old 01-14-04, 04:53 PM   #14
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Really good piece


Pros: Had excellent vocab, one the things that stood out for me at least. Had a really good flow to this, most of the lines were within 0-2 syllables apart, which is always good. Creativeness with multis and wordplay were really deep when used. The "close the chapter" line was very deep, I liked that line a lot. You also stayed on the topic well, and I liked how you included "graveyards" in the last line, which is the title.

Cons: I would want to see some more wordplay, and try to stay away from the suffix "tion", although you only used it for one bar.


I liked this piece a lot, very enjoyable to read, 9/10, looking forward to seeing some more from you. Please hit this up when you got the chance, much appreciated.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106602
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