Thread: Phil's Song
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Old 01-14-04, 06:11 PM   #2
Orikle
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Not a bad story but its a little simple and the flows a little sketchy..just work on the vocab...keep at the rhyme scheme and get things sorted..all in time mate...HIt my piece up..."I Always Leave My Lights On"...Cheers...Pz...
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