Extremely interesting how my opinions of this story's two characters changed with every line; maybe, it's because I am the pure median between the two . Conceptually and idealistically, this was outstanding . However, you could use some works with mechanics - but can't we all ? The two characters have decidedly-biased and different opinions, which makes for a good start . The ideas were good enough to make me mad that I didn't explore this topic first . Towards the end, though, it seemed like the topic got stretched a bit thin . I think it was partially intentional, but the way that you phrased the dialogue between the two gave me a chuckle . Truthfully, you're getting better with every piece that you drop, & that's the only way to get better . Keep going, man - Peace.

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