^lol at your cocky ass
dude, this was really dope. I noticed a lot of multies that I always thought were lacking from your pieces. The first line was a great opener, because internal multies make me cream in my pants. You had dope vocab to describe a lot of superficial things that brought the piece back to reality, so to speak, relating what you were saying to lives we actually live. I liked the description of the Earth as "the little blue ball". In the last line...I couldn't tell if you meant that life was the class...or that existence was the class...or if you were actually writing in class and needed finish up...hmm.
my favourite bar was:
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we take our families to seperate levels of hell
seperating our families from this hell called self
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the only thing I disliked about this piece was that you seemed very detached. You used to seem very into every piece you wrote, it made me more satisfied.
Peace