D Liver

who the fuck iz u man, thinkin u explicit?
u juzt another fag, battle? dun even risk it
Blah...not a great punch
u claimin' u hot steppin' up to the mic
but u only some wack mc that pre-writes
Pre-writing punches are played as fuck
fuckin' fake ass battler, ya name could b 50 cent
fake as hell, a snitch and u talk shit we dun undastand
Not a very good punch
fuck around, u end up on that sidewalk in a line of chalk
thatz what u get with that talk when u aint shit at all
What talk? ...its text
u on ya knees, cryin' prayin' bitchin' hopin' someone will notice when u speak
but then people walk over u like a doormat and leave footprintz whipin' they feetz
Good punch...but streatched to hell
get outta here dawg, this shit is just straight battlez
u probably better off just realeasin' intrumentalz.
Meh...not a good closer

Liver - work on ya punches and structure, take a visit to WEC and ill help you out there


Ex



ok mayne i read ya verse ya probably right mines worse//
still you "DUN" nomatter my verse gun shatter ya first//
If ya's is worst then why is it gon kill him? dont diss on yaself
cursed~i guess you can it that, you fuckin materialistic fag-rapper//
stead o' disc scratcher u like dick-smacker, go back to suckin dick of gay-crackerz//
Not the greatest punch
see mayne i dont give a fuck, na man//
imma spit n bust crush ya brain somin like the effect of a fryin pan//
Decent...
quit lyin man, so gay you could wear ya fagness in braids//
call it homo-rows n post on the net for sale on e-bay//
Decent Closer

Ex - Work on ya flow..try to keep all ya lines the same length, dont space ya bars and drop the // at the end. Work on ya punches and drop overload wit multis, they dont mean shit/

Overall - Explict took this, weak battle but he actually had 1 or 2 decent punches

Keep elevatin guys...and take a trip to WEC