find personals about the person and tie those into ya punches...they make your punches harder

make sure you punch is directed at the person, i see some people and it just is out there, not directed at all...therefor it dont hit and isnt a good punch

work on ya struct too

i aint street now....but i could be raised in a zoo and still 'keep-wild'
I slash and stabb i crush wid mad sounds, upon the crusts of crusty mantile

wild and mantile dont rhyme...make sure that your ending words rhyme

your lines are stretched also...cut them down, it throws the flow off

anything else you dont understand or need help wit? pm me or hit me up on aim

aim - Potent Prospect