730 takes this with the better format, for sure...

And he utilized some sweet wordplay in those punches.

Nice work.

Dan was a bit stretched.
Really didn't use wordplay or metas...
(cept for that "ruins" line, nice...
if you'd have done that more, this would be close as shit)

Just a bit outclassed was Dan...

But good shit, Dan...

You'll improve!

Peace

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