This was a real nice read ed...flow was perfect..and you got hold of the concept and managed to get into there minds and express it in words which is what all open mics like this are aiming to do..good use of vocab..like Nlitend said this should have been longer to express the meaning slightly more but this was still dopenes...only thing i can say bad about it is the structure..lol

tightness homizzle

keep it up