thyz waz iight... the 5trukture an wordplay waz good, not the be5t, but 5ertinly not the wor5t either. One thing that u needa work on iz your point... like the fir5t ver5e everythingz 5o good, the 5ekon one the motherz friend iz dead an bombz are dropen... like i dunno if iz ju5t me trippen on the wordz, or if it waz ju5t hard ta under5tand. Like High kla55 5ed, mabey iz ju5t the topik... my be5t advi¢e iz tri an get your point kro55 more klearly... other than that thyz waz pritty good kuz, K33P iT Kr@kIn KuZ.

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eh yo kan u returne the favoure???
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107276