i like these sorta drops, they keep you reading, you stayed on the topic good, and i liked the concept, the angle you came from with the first representing, when life is good, then the second when it can jus disappear in a second..... however, i thought it could have been executed better, the flow was ok, but i prefer slightly more syllables, and some of the rhyming was basic,... and some more imagery would have brought more feeling to the drop..... but it was still decent...6/10....