this peice was ill dude...

Better then the other shit I've read from you....

From L.A. to New York, there's too much pain to swallow
From the projects to trailors parks it's too much pain to swallow
yet i can't cry, cuz my heart still remains too hollow
so i'm a make these words shed tears to display my sorrow

Nice...
Overall I would give you an 8/10
some lines lacked...felt forced in other words....
but what you really put emotion into sounds great

This song would be sick on audio...you should look into that

(Please hit my sig up)!!!!!