Krakka -this verse needed more punches -just wasn't feelin' it.

Yo Look At This Herb Who Thinks Hes Tight Like 50 Cents/
He Thinks He Can Rap But This Guy Aint Really Makin Sense//
^not a strong opener, no punch: 3/10

Haha This Is Week This Shit Isnt Even Intense,u A Reject/
Ur Gettin Merked So Bad U Should Just Hang Your Self Or Snap Ya Neck//
^mostly filler, no punches: 4/10

I Thought It Would Be Over In A Couple Days But Now I Think It''ll Only Take A Couple Secs/(seconds)
I Got A Losin Record But Man Its Like This Guys A 5 Year Old Kid Battlelin A Vet//
^structure and flow was WAY off here: 3/10

U Say You Name Is This Guy Name Outcome/
But Ur Lines Are Wack I Think You Need To Get Outsome//
Outsome? no, doesn't even make sense, but attempted a personal: 3/10

Just Say It''my Name Is Outcome Im A Newb But Im Still Wack Son''/
By The Time This Battles Over Its 5 Votes To None//
^wrong, and no punches in tha closer -nothing about this bar or verse was hard, and you had almost no punches/ snaps or personals: 3/10

Outcome:

T,I like you already, you admit your a Krakka that shows intigrity/
Sucking at rap wont turn you black son saddly thats reality/
^ok opener: 5/10

Become my first casualty to pull a matrix revealin there own mortality/
I wonderd why you had a hole n ya head then it clicked, homosexuality/
^ok, decent: 6/10

Kraks so under my influence even his computers ready to follow me/
He's a local crack head, with no dick, feenin so much hes actin bitch/
^lol, hice wordplay: 6/10

Fuck your whole net existence,switch sites, before i admit you have syphlis/
thats the only way youll be ill and doctors can cure that sickness/
^lil played, but still funny, decent close. Coulda been a stronger verse, but: 6/10

Krakka: 16/50 32% (not)ill: Read up on some good battles, elevate your flows wit' wordplay and punches.

Outcome: 23/40 57.5% ill -still need some work, but not TOO bad a verse. (only 8 lines too, so it was a lil short)

Vote: Outcome