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Originally Posted by Credz
This was alright i thought....structure needs to be fixed up a bit though, try keeping the lines around the same length so its structured good....the flow in this i thought was alright, it stayed on point through out the whole thing....you had some good multies in this i thought as well....overall a alright piece...keep at it.
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You're a fucking idiot. Just because he doesn't type a paragraph for each line, his structure is totally fucked? Nah .. go home.
But to the piece ..
Your style on this was very nice, I liked the way you worded the whole piece ... Flow was nice, very easy to pick up .. Content was ill to say the least, very nice job ..
So if oppourtunity knocks,
answer and take it
Same shit, different day kid ..
Nothing ever changes.
^ My favorite part, and a very strong closer .. Something everybody can relate to, no matter who you are.
Very nice job here ..