Ok check it..
It was a simplistic piece..however I understood the whole piece..
it maintained flow..

" was fallin' straight to hell and there was a lake of fire/
Then I woke up and discovered my life had yet to expire/"

your deepist line..I know that was God teeling you something and hopefully you will learn from it..

cool piece kinda short..Use more vocab because you lacked...however flow was on point and the story telling was on point..Nice real story...

Laters..