putting this on your demo? well, firstly, you had some good ideas, however, a little played, maybe if you worked on it, maybe made it a bit longer..you got the multis right, vocab could be improved and i don't really see the flow of the first 'g to the a-n-g-s-t-a...' that part..kinda threw me of, but if you put in on audio, i think it would work better..

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