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Ok first thing I noticed about this was that the flow was on and off. One Bar you'd rhyme like 4 words and in the next line you'd rhyme two syllables. What I enjoyed most about this was that it provided the sense of actually being there for the most part. The description held well but the story telling element is was sorta lacking. It seems like this was rushed somewhat, there would be a deep line followed by a corny line because it rhymed.
ex.
i beleive these cufflings bring me good luck
i can't imagine all this was just over a fuck
Worht the read though 7/10
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