this is a gud peice.... and so true... all playas have this feeling about them that just makes everything worth doing for them, mostp people need to learn to listen to their friends wen they tell them that someone is just bad 4 yah all around(myself included). it didnt rhyme all the way through but that was ok. the one thing that i can tell you is to try and get rising and falling actions and try to help the poem climax some were. yours ran a litl on the same pace and had no points that made you read it over to grasp your full meaning. good job tho... keep it up^