it was ite. that begining, where it kept on saying it takes one second to do w/e, has been done a few times. it kinda dragged in the middle, but it came on strong at the end. the bigest problem with this poem i saw is that poetry is supposed to make people really think, but u kinda draw the conclusion for them. work a lil on ur poetic techniques (metaphore, oxymoron, ect.) and make it a more complex and u can have a winner here with ur message. so, in short, u need work on ur technique, but the thought is there, stay up.