it wasn't bad. it kinda dragged, cuz u were basicly saying the same thing, just in different words. it was kinda simple, but this didn't really need to be complex, the only thing is u need to give the reader a lil more of urself in a piece like this cuz its basicly just ur emotion speaking for itself. put a lil more of urself in it and u can have something here. it was still pretty good though, don't make all ur pieces this simple though, but the simplicity did work here.

return the favor on into eternity please