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i liked it. it had tha stream of consciousness technique i like to use. it still was kinda simple though. u need more metaphores, similies and all those other poetic techniques. it kinda jumped around, so u need to focus more on ur topic. one more thing, don't mention ur topic so many times, it kinda cheapens its value. stay up n keep writing though.
please return the favor on into eternity. thanks.
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