Had a very passive feel. Misty...fleeting.

Which maybe played well to what i percieved as the subject. Deterioration to death. Demise even. From beinfg on the brink, to actually going over and into it...

...i especially liked how you came back to 'responsibility'. Whcih i percieved as being the person thinking of family. Bills. Money. The person's responsiblity's in life that he/she can no longer fulfill....so becomes sad. But mainly about family.

The end was sweeping. Fitting even. Maybe a bit uneven and akward at times. But i enjoyed reading it. It was eerie, had an unusual sense to it..

Maybe someone who's just been hit by a car. Or the eventual demise of someone with cancer. A man of war. Or a woman of service. It's all relative to this in a way...(i think?!)...

..resp...