Try to keep your bars a resonable length, on the one line sorta thing...the flow was decent, could do with some work but overall was pretty well executed. You got potential as a good story teller, emotion n' imagry came through here:

So as they went outside Satan said 2 join you have to at this instant shoot that man/
He pulled the gun and aimed where he planned for the bullet to land/"

Liked the satan/psyhic switch thing you had goin' on....3/5 had some nice lines and as i said you got potential - just work on your structure..keep spittin' though.