thought this was ok... some good imagery going and you told it well... i would lose some of the lines tho, its a bit long and some go off the topic a bit,,, also i would lose the titanic line...played!...
but mostly it was decent. the scheme was ok, and it flowed reasonably well thhru.... not bad.....
..return the favour....
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