thyz waz pritty good... glad u got outta that evan bar thing... i alwayz thought that threw off yo flow. The topik waz good but it 5eemed like the 5tory waz goin no were... not 5umtin that i would prefer to read but thyz waz a good read, not my thing thou. al5o if u threw more mutliez in that would probaly inhan5e the flow alot... all in all thyz waz a good pei¢e... juz tri an get more de5kriptive.