This was a good piece here man.....you had good structure in this....i must say you really are improving a lot man, you elevated a lot since i first met you, keep doing that...you had some good flow in this i thought, it stayed on pretty well....i dont know how you would add more multies to this like Yaz said when every line about had one lol, you were fine on the multies man...overall this was a nice piece here...made a good read, enjoyed it...keep at it man.