Nice man...

Im not gona cut it down and explain why it was good..

But i want to comment on ur bar scheme/structure...

The way u write ur senteces are very interesting...I mean, it feels like the line should of finished a couple of words back, but it feels right to keep at the same sentence....Iv noticed that Aesop can do this good...But he does it without any internal rhymes, where as you do....

Very nice man...Jus doing my re-search, finding out more on my S.S opponent...lol


Ill be lookin forward to seing your piece man...