You got some things to work on, theres no skill in sight
And you got the balls to claim ur da sickest on dis site?
opening isnt much.. set was iight, not a bad punch with the follow through, personal could been a little better
Please take into consideration tha wackness you project
I'll punch your fuckin face in & ur attackless you protect
setup starts pretty nice, i kinda see your follow through punch, but i think you need some rewording to get it more across
There absolutely nothin you could do ta stop the bleeding
Bitch ........ every punch in ya verse you got from feeding
punchs arent that hard, but there decent... Make sure he feeding though other wise your follow through loses strength
10 to 16 lines, he wasnt an herb untill the prick seen rhymes
The perfect way to describe u is w/ Feeble's newbie sign
Heh, good use of the "prop" Set up wasnt anything specil[b]
You put ya best foot forward with a whole shit load of effort
Kid rolls with some wins only if Busta & Flip Mode were seperate
[b] could have had a better wording to help the punch along
Hasnt, and doesnt really look like thats gonna be happenin'
Sonned you off the check in what made you try & rap again?
good connection... follow through was a good line
See I can key quicker than you could prewrite some 20 bars
Knock you out and next thing you see is some funny stars
not feeling the funny stars bit... the punchs is so-so
Leave you dumbfounded flabberghasted and felt confused
Cuz I take all your lines and Convert them to self abuse
Im grinning at your self abuse line, not a bad concept, setup was ok
We gonna call you the striker, you really killin your own rep
Worn down like old wipers, w/ dat verse you fillin your holes yet
these lines could have been a little better... with the metaphor and punch
This is the last bar for your first loss here at my humble home
& to claim you tha best will only leave u w/ a crumbled dome
ending wasnt that good, not a real punch for starters and lackd of a good metaphor

Your verse started off andf or the most part keep direct, you hit with alot more ok punchs than ive seen 75 percent of front lines do so far.. The punchs were constant, but they were the hardest hitting... You could have gotten a little more personal... Your flow was on target, but were are tha multis??? metaphors/wordplay could have been stronger, vocabulary wasnt bad..






Listen...conversion dis guy is a clown,so when i fire da pound //
he aint gon get killed by his "location" but he gon die "from-a-round" //
eh not that good of an opener... follow through was an ok personal
u fuckin with with me u 0-2 dogg cuzz u speak-nonsense //
even da "admin" wanted da ban conversion cuzz in his flow and bars he aint "c-progress" //
ok punch... follow through is a little over drawn
but u not tuff save da actin and shit,u aint da type da clappin a clipp //
& if my doggs dont pop u they a leave "black and blue" like "african crips" //
the follow through is good, but the flow on the connection is sort of killing it
dis nigga con think havin "make up sex" is puttin "lip stick in his hand" and grabbin his dick //
u talk like ya rapin in his sick..but its often ya flop //
follow through seemed more like a filler not the hardest punch
but if u see me swarin in with 2 gloks,ima leave ya "soul wet" like u was in a "flood" walkin with "tube socks" //
and con u suck dogg u neva been "sick" like u was born with a "flu shots" //
ok concept with the flu shots part.. both your set up and follow through werent bad..
why battle marv i gues u dont know-me-b //
but goin against me u "playin ys self" like "listenin 2 ya own cd" //
eh
fagget u could "feed" off my verse and still u wont "eat" me //[pause]

me suck? nah who u provokin ya pen-slow //
hmmm.. your follow through doesnt really stand up well
look at ya record u like dat "talk show host" "operah" ya "wins-lo" //
marvolous is a newbie u rite but homie sick they know //
follow through falls short of what ive seen so far..., the oprah lines was decent
but i guess ya moms is "ben aflak" cuzz when she on her knee's she only kiss "j-lo" //
ok ending.. could have had it directed a little better

over all you did have much creativity in your verse... Alot of those lines are played concepts you tryed to stick a twist on.. your punchs werent that hard hitting your flow was off, multis werent really there..

*sigh*

Vote- Marvolousj1009
He came with played lines and didnt have that strong of punchs, although Conversions LACK of metaphors and wordplay lost this battle for him, but i mean just barley.. Close battle you to.

conversion you got it though, stick with it, work on your metas and wordplay you'd be dope.



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