Yes I'm a newbie, but after this you'll really think I'm not.
When I drop my verse, you feel like you just been shot.
opening could have had more, not much of a punch in your bar.. meta isnt that hard
My verbs and adverbs hit you with everything I got
while your nouns stay limp in your hands like your cock.
lacking a little bit of strength in your punchs as well as direction
Yes KLO's the name, and I'm about to explain
why battling me is the worst kind of pain.
filler...
You're just a bitch, yeah, don't even continue;
you'll need a support group after the raping I'ma give you.
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Don't even drop your shit, you might as well eat it;
the nutrional value is high, you probably need it
weak punch, metaphor needs to be worked on
and the stains on your teeth are less humiliating than being defeated.
not a bad closing, punch was alright

you lack direction and strength in you bars.. Metaphors could have come across a little better, try an stay away from talking about yourself so much. Your flow was on target for the most part.. But lacked in your multis

Klo don't try to escape, I kill kids with lines in a jolt..
I put out the light in ya head, u have no time to re volt..
ok opening, metaphor is alright, punch was ok
to get the win with good character, he's methodly hoping...
two wrongs dont make a right, so you need ethical motive..
losing flow a little, metaphor was good
I aint readin ur verse, cuz u prolly aint rhymin, fuck..
this little bitch tried checkin in after his time was up..
oh did he now
my lines are based in truth, givin you some pounding..
ur lines are awestricken, cuz they're all dumb founded
punch is decent, good vocab though.liking your follow through
dont give me this newbie shit, im already past it
im just wonderin why yall like gettin ya ass whipped ?
kind of a weak ending, not that good of a punch.. meta isnt there

overall your verse was ok.. metaphors were ok, same with your punchs not much wordplay in it...

vote- Feeble Minded
Came with better punchs, his metaphors were better, flow wasnt the greatest but he still took it.

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