I hate to go against grain here.. erm.. actually.. I couldn't care less.

My honest opinion is..

Thesis: You came alright... but you had 3 or 4 played punches that I picked up on right away which made the points of your verse minimize. You also had one too many fillers.

Com: You came a little better than alright.. but still dissapointing.. You had nice set ups.. Good concepts.. but lack of hard punches. Wordplay was a bit forced.

Overall COM takes this because of his creativity and without played lines. A couple of his lines made me smile.

So HONEST vote

COM

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