Rule...
(this does not affect my decision but check your spelling) The approach was nicely done, and good use of different words...my main qualm with this was the flow of the piece...my belief is that your flow was based on a line by line basis, but not as a whole... every couple lines (3-4) has a good flow to them but then the pace of the piece changes with the next part...while you could not make a new paragraph due to it being a constant thought, keeping it as 1 long part hurt the read as a whole

N lit...
First off, you didnt need the little reminder at the end, sometimes its best to just let the reader interpret what they want from your piece...reading your piece was hard at times because alot the the rhymes were just plain off...

I walk around being frowned upon, I’m just an outcast
I stop in the street, kids look down and try to act hard

The idea of the call and response approach had good potential with the idea you had... i think it would have came off better had the two voices spoken differently, different word choice, vocabulary and how they say things...the piece kept a nice pace to it, no real problem...i think your word choice could have been far more diverse and sprinkle in some vocabulary every now and again

vote: rule