Eh...

This was ok, the emotion was definately there.
Some decent flow displayed.

But ya vocab, metas, and wordplay were sadly lacking.

Work on complexity.

This was all straight forward and that's good for a conversation.

But rap needs some life to it.

Good for a newbie effort, though.

Peace

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