edicius done it for me on this one, emotion through the text really shone through on this one, the vocab was really improved on his behalf while trapt came nice (trapt i know who you are! lol) The flow was cool from both, the structure seemed suprising how it was the same, but ah well, edicius takes this on the depth and twists in the lines, respectable battle form both of you..

Pz. V/edicius