All i got to say is well done,i got into this piece, wanted to keep reading,
the imagery was excellent, felt like you were painting pictures with words,lol,
no but seriously the concept was dope, nice story, original aswell,
took me a few reads to get the flow, but it was nice when i did,
i cannot really fault this piece, good drop.
could you check this, constructive critism would be good = )
thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109162