hmmm
gangsta rap.
not my cup of tea, but this actually quite dope.
it is reall well structured, and the flow is great, it's not full of shit that i can't relate to, and it still remains street enough to actually be able to sell if it was mainstream.
This exactly the type of shit you wanna put on a cd to sell it, man.

anyways, into the rhyme. I thought you could have added more internal rhyming...it seemed all your lines built up to that final rhyme, which just sort of cut it off...the whole piece flows together as a whole if you add internal rhyming, and maybe some multies.
The content was dope...well, the parental part anyways. I don't know about the first bit. It doesn't seem like the kind of way some one would treat a friend who was jealous of their talent. I dunno.
There isn't much else I can say about this dude, it isn't my area of expertise, so to speak.
nice piece though =)

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