Token - i liked the way you handled the topic, a good concept and interseting, which seemed to flow nicely, and i liked the way the story developed, towards the end tho, the flow fell a bit, thought it could have been worded better, but for most thought the scheme worked well....
whitelightning - a nice slant on the topic, and the flow got going, but thought the scheme in places could be better, it seemed to stop n start a bit, if ya know what i mean, other than that it was decent, liked the way ya finished it...
over all im going with Token, thought concept was better and a better feel to the verse, but quite close....vote=token