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Old 01-24-04, 03:44 PM   #8
Xpress Lane
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Vote- Outcome, almost by default.

Skills- your opening lines were beyond elementary. You may as well have open with "Hi my name is Skills and I’m here to say, I’m the greatest rapper in the U.S.A!" Basically you just talked about how great you are and how you'd end his career. That being said, your only real punch was like " dont know why I challenged this little prig// U spit out more shit then an oil rig".

Outcome- I dunno, your verse was alright. Certainly good enough to. You could've taken a few extra minutes to read it and make little corrections. For instance...

" know you jack of to spider man but, damn, your avatars ridiculous
Jump off his dick would be the precise word but im not meticulous/"
- Making word, become wording would sound alot better.

Also weak closer, kinda came off like a line from 8 Mile.
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