bi.. it was a good story i liked it, but you got really deep.. thats why i only liked it.. and not more.. your vocab was a lil blah.. but thats alright.. it worked..

mentill..really good piece i could follow it very well.. your structure was about as good as your battling skills but thats alright.. it still flowed really well..

v/mentill - you had a better piece.. that i found more enjoyment in reading

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