Strange ending, I wasn't expecting it. I actually had to read it over, more thoroughly again. Overall this piece was alright. With a story-line structure like this, it's not always smart to put too much dialect in it, and if you are you have to make sure you put alot of emotion in the words. I didnt feel all of that emotion, but i enjoyed the read. Nice piece. Keep writing.

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."