Well first of all....the first thing i noticed was the emotion that was put into this. I can relate to this. The vocab wasn't to bad pretty simple, The flow was good though. Only thing that i myself would work on, would be the structure, try to make lines same length so the flow would be even better, but it's all good, we' all got diff styles. And you did stay on topic this time so that's good. I hope everything work's out.

keep droppin
peace