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Flyweight
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IP:
verse by seven
My lyrics eat Xplicit like piranhas, with alot of laughter and drama
Have him more excited then when I showed my dick to his momma
A question Mark, so I keep fucking up and pressin’ sparks
Hit this guy so hard, he’ll light up like a Christmas tree in the dark
Your smoked more than a pack of cigarettes, on a store rack
Your trash and wack, that’s how come I’ll say your made from scratch
Rap is fiction not fact, atleast for you, I can say that has to be true
Never seen you battle before, and I can tell I rap better than you do
I flew a few punchlines, in this battle on the front page of frontlines
His experience is reading a poem, so now he says he has done rhymes
You can never laugh at me, damn dawg it will always be so sad to see
After this win I get, I’ll put it in my sig so you can always stay mad at me
So juss take the loss, your juss a bitch who had to pay the final cost
I got you frozen in your place more than your face if you was Jack Frost
---vote down---
1-2lines--good opener nice meta
3-4lines--great pounch nice meta
5-6lines--blah weak pounch
7-8lines--blah nuthing really special
9-10lines--ok pounches
11-12lines--lol good pounchline
13-14lines--lol good closer with pounch and meta
--not that great of a verse--
verse by xplicit
hey middle weight who u foolin? what message u sendin?//
I said 10-20 lines but from yah class I could make it *seven*//
blabberin poet exlodin his bullshit and whinin bout a crew//
Ur dirt like garbage needs it and garbage needs u to//
I can be a mentor an idol juss ma image can shine a light//
since god dont like u dont mean u gotta ruin a site//
the presence of u makes me feel like I aint even gotta worry//
since u "middle weight" still means u aint goin no where in a hurry//
have u felt the strike of lightning or heart shatterin heat?//
cuz it juss took u off ur seat and its danglin u by the feet//
all is said and done beef is settled on the streets B//
ur a half breed I'm pure blood, it would take more then ur words to reach me//
I'm lookin at u in pure disgust I'm sayin this sadly//
u might as well bow down cuz this juss made me ur daddy//
--vote down--
1-2lines--good pounch included personal
3-4lines--weak pounchline
5-6lines--nuthing special here
7-8lines-- not that great of a pounch
9-10lines--good meta and pounch but not that hard though
11-12lines--blah
13-14lines--lol good pounch
--conclusion--
my vote goes to 7 for a better stronger verse although it was weak i really expected more from you...categorias that seven takes is pounches,metas,
pretty weak battle
--168--
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