seemed like you were concentrating alot on multis... which theres nuthin wrong with, my last coupla drops have been like that, experimenting with flows, but i find that if there overused it taked away from the read... also the syllable count in some lines was stretched, so knocked the flow, the second verse, was better set out, but the scheme was choppy, the way you rhymed,,, but the topic was ok, and the apporach ok.... jus could have beem worded a bit better in places to iron out the creases.... not bad....