Real

c'mon dogg im too good....u shouldve piked some1 else/
cus like putting ur dik in ur ass u fuked ur self/
Decent Opening
and u cant shoot guns so asian jus quit it/
before i treat ur head like a garage and park my bullets in it/
Ehh...just ok, not the greatest rhyme
and really dogg i aint gon lie/
but you aint gon b the best "tilleyedie"/
not a good personal, it was just ok
so fucc wit u heard i'll treat u like a herb/
and treat ur brains like a bumb and leave it lyin on curb/
not bad..
lets see ....how should i end this 1/
fake ass jet li stop it cus u not the one/
u rhymed one with one... meh

You had some ok punches...flow was alittle choppy, work on ya rhyme scheme, it lacked


Eye

I beat him before but i offered a honest rematch
the bitches eyes popped out an he went into relapse
Not really direct punch
i never knew that you would actually accept
trust me, id kill you, but being nice is my rep
Just ok
what the hell, u could juss keep comming wit punches
i'd block em counter em, eat em up like asian lunches
Decent, coulda re-worded the concept
ima destroy ya break ya down inch by fuckin inch
pull a 50 cent cuz 'I Smell Pussy', no thats actually ur stinch
Decent but coula been re-worded
dont need to clinch this ill split this make u drop some sweat
cuzz thizz bitch cant spit hot shit unless its sweat thats wet
What? Dont get it at all
ill throw u too ya chair soo then i can surly say i seat u
i could bite off a newb like 'your mom sucked me' still beat you
Meh... re-word it
i said the max was 16 lines but ill finish this with 14 bitch
lika glitch in the system ya screwed ya torn like a stitch
sayin u kill him wit under the amount of lines is extremely played

Your verse had good flow but you need to re-word ya punches cuz some didnt make scence.

Overall - i think Reall took this with punches, his flow was bad but eye didnt connect and hit wit any hard punches

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