Lirael

Its venom this Vet Spits, and your my Next Bitch ..
cause the only people ..
.. that have Trouble with Word's, are Dyslexic's!
Not a bad opening
Dont try to Hollar Kid,
i'll pop ya Collar Lid ..
cause your whole Career's in Ruins .. like an Archaeologist!
Played.. i spit that shit myself back when i was a newbie
Why Bother to Spit?!
Its obvious your getting blasted,
Saying goes 'Like Father like Son' ..
.. so im guessing your an overweight, unemployed bastard!
ya struct is fucked... dont know which lines go wit which
Wont even Blink a Sweat,
as i Sink this 'Vet' ..
..and leave Word's Running .. like the fucking Ink was Wet!
Herd that shit before too.. played

Overall - Ya struct is fucked.... you must see people drop like this but your doin it all wrong...at the end of my post ill show you how ya verse should'a looked


Word

Ill leave your head spinning like a spiders abdomen,
no one feels you, a plaster mold wont even adapt to him
Ok opening
He could be in the bible with a brother named Cane, n still wouldn't be Able,
cuz Lirael couldnt rock the mic with a babys craddle
Played...
Lirael One n Jacent, a crew of two pigs in a blanket,
n both couldn't outplay me with a radiostation
Not so good.. played again
Both wear Nike when they fuck each other, no interruptions, they "Just Do It",
This wack kid is fucking garbage, like sex with raw sewage
I hate to say it, but its played again
His structure is outdated like old buildings, a thing of the past,
but maybe he could rap...before stella got her groove back
Played again...

Overall - Take A Trip To Wackness Emergancy Center, you need work on ya punches

ok now Lirael.. this is how ya verse shoulda looked if u were gon use that struct

Its venom this Vet Spits, and your my Next Bitch
cause the only people that have Trouble with Word's...
...are Dyslexic's!
Dont try to Hollar Kid, i'll pop ya Collar Lid
cause your whole Career's in Ruins ..
....like an Archaeologist!
Why Bother to Spit?! Its obvious your getting blasted,
Saying goes 'Like Father like Son' ..
.. so im guessing your an overweight, unemployed bastard!
Wont even Blink a Sweat, as i Sink this 'Vet'
and leave Word's Running .. like the fucking Ink was Wet!

ohh.. also.. lay of multis..they mean shit.... like 5% of battling

[B]my vote - even though lirael had fucked struct and overloaded wit multis he still got this wit harder punches[/B}

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