poseidon:
this was actually much better than I had suspected, Your verses went off topic alot. The way you worked in the topic in each verse made it a little better..but you really should have stayed on topic.You could have put more details in the story though..it was straight
filed-
I liked the deepness in this shit right here.It would have made a better poem than a regualr open mic.. Multis would have helped. But nonetheless..you still had a good ass flow.. some although some of your words didnt rhyme.but..in my opnion you still won.
v/Filed