as i said first drop here for a year got alot of shit for what i dropping before but i've gone away practiced my ass off and hopefully it's paid off, tell me what you think...

nobody told you i was this raw/
before you tried to grab the mic and got ya fist tore/ for being piss poor/
i'll be writing rhymes till' my wrists sore/ and i mean sore/
i'll twist you backwards like van damme, jean claude/
snap you in 2 like a bean stalk/ with the mean talk/
i wait patiently then swoop like a tree hawk/

(and another short written)

i calculate rhymes in my brain, i'll even show the math
i move so fast/ like a ghost i don't appear in photographs
g.o.d on the mic, knowing all the facts/
even if you fixed the card game i'm holding all the jacks
hot when you want like fire from a tap/
like a dog with diorea, i'm tired of the crap/
i'll kill people for cash call me the hired gat/
crouching tiger, hidden dragon, no wires from my back

as much feedback as possible please, thanx for reading.