To Be Completely Honest... The Story Was Entertaining... & Like You Said It Was
A Rough Draft...

The Flow Was On & Off... It Was Kind Of Choppy... & You Were To Repetative With
Your Words.. I Dont See Anything Wrong With Repeating Some Words Over To Get
The Full Effect.. But You Did It A Few To Many Times..

Overall Av.. It Wasn't A Bad Piece... It Was Interesting To Read... But If We Are
Gonna Go Based On Flow.. It Wasnt That Great & Kinda Hard To Follow...

But Hey, What Do I Know.. You Said My Piece Was Garbage & I Actually Thought
It Flowed Pretty Well... Maybe We Both Dont Know What We ARe Talking About...

Or Maybe It Just Flows Better When We Spit It In Our Own Heads...