Aus...I enjoyed reading your piece...structure seemed to stay on target as well as your overall topic ideal....your ending wa heart felt as well as the overall meaning....enjoyed the piece congrats
Derive
ecent piece just seemed liked you went with the easiest way to get a rhyming sentence out....there was one small thing i noticed that you should maybe change in the future
I was off for a mourning walk when i was confronted with a stranger across the street,
She looked awfully tired and was struggling hard to get on her feet.
I hurried across the street and quickly helped this lady stand,
instead of "I hurried across the street and quickly helped this lady stand" You should have put "i hurried across and quicly helped her stand"
not too bad but not worthy of a win
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