brethren takes this ..

simply because the other kids entire verse was filler...

yng, ya verse wasnt horrible like most FL verses are..

you just definitely need to elevate and go to WEC, learn there.

You need to compare things in order to make punches, for example..

you didnt do that, just keyed up some stuff and made it rhyme.

Brethren, you did ok.. you tried too hard to be creative tho i think.

just let it flow, and make sure it rhymes well and theres a punch...

and make sure the punch is original, and you'll be ok...


V/ brethren.

go vote here fairly, or i will take this vote back:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108165