I don't believe there is ever a thing called being "too harsh".

Hm... this was rather raw. Wasn't cooked well, if you know what I mean. I think this shows a lot of promising talent if you'd take things and work them over. Process it in your head, and revise things. Some of those lines like the dimension/detention one in general was really great. If you'd work this peice over you can come up with a lot of better lines it too.

It's promising, keep up the good work.

~Irenic~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.