this was a solid battle...........both verses brought depth and imagery..........but Kiissiick's was a lil too much, tha breakdown:

Taktik- rhyme scheme- 8, story- 8, flow- 7.5, total- 23.5

incredably solid......started off slow and shaky....but flow picked up and your rhyme scheme kept me readin, nyce usage of multis, diction was a lil under par........but the feelin was deep, tha best piece i read of yours.....structure could use improvement

Kiissiick- rhyme scheme- 6.5, story- 7.5, flow- 7, total- 21

not as solid....but i liked it, it fell off at alot of points, takin away from tha story, rhyme scheme was not that great, flow was a lil off, kind of hard to read....sometimes it was like i was pullin teeth, no hard feelins, but try to place everythin you wanna say more compact.....less bars....and i noticed alot of redundance, but props for expansion.....its betta to drop too long than too short,

vote taktik, no hard feelins, may tha best man win, taktiks just kept me readin, peace, 1

p.s. vote on my battle...........oh yea... just taktik, kiissiick has already done it

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